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Worked before/after examples

Verb forms

Before After
We have received the technical reports from HQ. We received the technical reports from HQ.
This device has been being used at Boeing since 2005. Boeing started to use this device in 2005.
The test is continued by the operator. Continue the test.
The screws should be replaced. Replace the screws.
The system is currently running diagnostics. The system does diagnostic tests now.

Vocabulary and phrasing

Before After
Ensure file exists before running. Make sure that the file exists before you run the command.
Rotate the cover until the jacks are accessible. Turn the cover until you can get access to the jacks.
Extend the jack until the wheels are clear of the ground. Extend the jack until the wheels do not touch the ground.
Make sure that these steps are followed. Obey these steps.
Utilize approximately 3 liters of water. Use about 3 liters of water.
Perform a compression of the log files prior to upload. Compress the log files before you upload them.

Noun clusters

Before After
Main gear door retraction winch handle Main-gear-door retraction-winch handle
Runway light connection resistance calibration Calibration of the resistance of the runway light connection
Remove the engine transmission housing attachment bolts. Remove the bolts that attach the transmission housing to the engine.

Procedural rewrite (condition first, one instruction per sentence)

Before:

You should check that the reservoir has been filled with the correct fluid and, after attaching a clear tube to the bleed screw while ensuring its free end is submerged, the pedal can be pumped and held so that opening the screw releases trapped air.

After:

  1. Fill the reservoir with the correct fluid.
  2. Attach a clear tube to the bleed screw.
  3. Put the free end of the tube in a container of fluid.
  4. Push the pedal three times. Hold the pedal down.
  5. Open the bleed screw one half turn. Air and fluid flow into the tube.
  6. Close the bleed screw. Release the pedal.
  7. If air continues to come out, do steps 4 thru 6 again.

Warnings and cautions (command first, then risk)

Before:

Note that serious data loss may potentially occur if the --force flag is used against production.

After:

CAUTION: Do not use the --force flag on the production database. The flag deletes the rows that do not match the source.

Before:

Touching the terminal could result in electrocution.

After:

WARNING: Do not touch the terminal. The terminal has a dangerous voltage.

Common mistakes checklist

  • Dropped articles: "Insert pin in bracket" → "Insert the pin in the bracket."
  • Synonym rotation: check/verify/confirm for the same action → one term, everywhere.
  • Hedges: "you may want to," "it is recommended that" → an imperative or "must."
  • Instruction buried in a NOTE: notes never instruct. Move the instruction to a numbered step.
  • Semicolon joining two clauses → two sentences.
  • "There are three bolts on the panel" → "The panel has three bolts."